Stealing's a Crime and there will always be a consequence.
When something's stolen, it's hard to get back.
Katie Lunge's high cut 300$ purple ugg boots have gone missing. This may not seem like a big deal to you, but it was to her.
Katie had recieved these fashionable boots on her birthday last fall. They were given to her by her 2 loving and caring parents. Katie had said and I now quote " Those boots meant the world to me, especially since they were given to me for my 13th birthday from my family. " These boots have been stolen by a theft, who we hope won't remain anomynous.
Katie Lunge's treausered boots have been missing. This essay will argue that Katie Lunge's expensive boots have been stolen, because these boots aren't any ordinary boots, their uggs. Uggs are 300$ and admired by every teenage girl. A teen could've stolen them because maybe their family can't afford a pair, and she really wanted them to simply fit in. Also we think that the girl who has stolen the boots could have a criminal record in the past or had grown up in a broken family where she hadn't learned wrong from right.
You have structured this paragraph exactly how I'd like to see it. You have an excellent hook which made sense to me thanks to your context. I also like the thesis.
ReplyDeleteWhat's missing in your context is who this person is. Is this a real person or is it from a book? I couldn't tell. Who is Katie Lunge?
Also, your introduction should be formatted as one paragraph. That's an easy change. Just keep all the senteces together instead of breaking them into their own paragraphs.